Last year I wanted to do something special for my dad's sixty-fifth birthday. He's a huge western fan, so I decided to write him a western short story. Oakridge was the result of that project and, rather thankfully, he enjoyed what he read. So did a lot of other people who ended up reading it too.
I had a blast writing it too. So much so that the story is now the first part in a loose trilogy called 'The Satanic Mills Trilogy'.
The problem lay in the fact that that version was a bit sloppy. I rushed its finish to get it printed in time for dad's birthday, and the proofreading wasn't that great.
Now I'm ready to put Oakridge out there and I need your help to do it. I've proofread the story a few times now, but I've long given up on trusting my own eyes, so I'm counting on your help.
I have five copies of the story that I want to give away to people who will want to proof read it. Rather warily I'm asking you to cast somewhat of a critical eye over what's there. Not narratively speaking, I'm happy with that, but with consistency of dialogue - and dare I say it - punctuation.
What's in it for you?
Well first you'll get your hands on a free copy of the story. Not a digital version, but a honest-to-goodness bound version of it. And, when I put out the first run (and any subsequent runs) you'll be immortalised in print on the acknowledgements page. You'll also get a second complimentary version of the story in all its proofread glory with your name indelibly scorched across the page in recognition of your help.
Oakridge is a violent thriller. Very violent. And sweary. So if that doesn't sound like your thing, then please let someone else have a copy.
If you do want to help and get your free copy then you can follow me on twitter @nick_selby1 and tweet me, or you can e-mail me at nick.selbywrites@gmail.com. It will be first come first served...unless I really like you.
I look forward to hearing from you.
Nick
The Writing of Nick Selby
This is a place where I'll be sharing some of my short stories and writing exercises. Hopefully it'll push me into being bolder and publishing more. I hope you enjoy your stay, Nick
Wednesday 11 June 2014
Monday 9 June 2014
Black Mass At Zaatari
I wrote 'Black Mass At Zaatari' maybe three months ago. There was a news item about the conditions for Syrian refugees in the Jordanian camp at Zaatari. The imagery, although not graphic, was horrifying. I felt moved to write, and although I don't consider myself a politically motivated writer I felt I had to reflect the gross injustice of the situation. I can't ask you to 'enjoy' this story, but I hope you feel something after reading it.
Nick 09/06/2014
Black Mass At Zaatari
They gather.
They gather, and in silence, they
carry out their ablutions. Greasy paws smear grey cheeks and rub at
red eyes. Fingers explore black mouths and run eagerly over hairy arms.
When they are done the hymns begin. A
gentle unified hum of confirmation that they are ready. And they are ready.
They need an offering. Something -
someone - to offer up to him. A sacrifice of real value. So they seek her out. They
rush out into the heat of the midday to find her. It is the crying, the
beautiful crying, that draws them to her. Her tears, sweet like nectar, draw
the mass to her eyes.
Her eyes. Beautiful eyes. Lost so
quickly. If you could find them, look into them, you would see the tenderness
that drew the congregation down on her. The sweetness. The innocence. She is
young and she is innocent and she is perfect. Perfect for him. She will do
nicely. They settle on her.
Her eyes. Beautiful eyes. You will
find them behind the sprawling mass of black. You’ll see them, blue discs of
desperation and pain. There, behind the black mass. The Black Mass. Disciples
of Job. Shining priests of the Cult of
Death. Followers of the grim faced laughing god. The grey smile that grows as
they worship his name. The frantic procession that will make her an offering
begins - the securing of their covenant with him.
The hymn that began as a gentle hum grows
into a chaotic ecstatic chorus. A swelling frenzied shrill of spiritual
excitement.
They crawl and dance and shudder in
excitement. Fetid feet stamp shit and disease into her already crusting eyes.
Eyes that are being slowly glued shut by the putrid orchestration of the
devoted brethren. Monks dressed in carapace habits of an oily sheen swarming
and shimmering beneath an unforgiving sun.
It is not only the eyes that
disappear beneath their ritual. They gather at another favourite altar. Her
mouth. They gather, tumbling over one another to prove their devotion to their
patron. They cluster and chant in the cloister of her broken and shallow gasps.
She is hungry. Agonisingly so. She wants nothing more than to eat, but the
hollow of her mouth is filled with their devotionals. Rancid chorals sent up to
their lord in the most sacred of cathedrals.
As they gather, she cries.
Death hears her sweet song too. Breathless
mewling that dies before it can reach the ears of men. He hears it though.
Savours the flavour. Sweet, like honey. He wants more. And they will make sure
that he gets it. He is pleased with their offering - the sublime reek of their
success. The stench fills the air and the terror spreads from child to child.
Sister to sister. Twin to twin.
They gather. In chapels and churches.
Ears and mouths and eyes and noses and worse. They gather. In their glistening
robes that flicker over vestments of black and blue and green. Holy marble that
ripples obscenely as the congregation swarms.
The number of faithful grows with
each Black Mass. Their message, the contagious Gospel of Decay, spreads with
ease. The Word spreads in splashes of brown and yellow. The Word spews forth in
bilious waves and the message passes from child to parent and back again. With
each little suffering one that falls; with each parent that crumbles in grief,
their religious fervour grows. Their celebrations become frenzied orgies of
praise and worship.
With each passing day the Black Mass
grows and his grey smile broadens.
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